well if you really do... theres somthing you may want to know...
Me and one of my best mates are currently doing a co-operative writing thing... we are both writing a short story, in the same setting and universe, but from the perspective of two different characters (me with Jareth, and my mate with an elite pilot from the first colony)....
It doesnt really affect this too much, as the storys both make sense without each other... just thought you may want to know that, my mate helped with a lot of the ideas in the universe
Anyway, i'l post up the next section soon...
Post Merge: May 07, 2010, 06:38:35 PM
Chapter One continued:Ten minutes later and Jareth was in a service elevator, rattling and hissing all the way down to level -6,000 of the lower sector. The elevator which was roughly ten metres squared was packed with engineers, all wearing the basic uniform of oil stained and grey jumpsuits. Jareth was similarly clothed, with the exception of chevrons on his shoulders, and an officer’s cap with fold-down headset. All of this denoted him as a head engineer of the second colony.
“Hey Jareth, you heard about the expansion?”
A dark haired engineer sidled over to him, squeezing between the mass of bodies. She flicked her fringe to one side and looked him in the light blue eyes, noting the three day old stubble across his chin and general look of fatigue...
“You don’t look so good, been sleeping alright?”
Jareth nodded; mumbling that he hadn’t heard about the expansion yet, and was just overloaded with work as usual. The other engineer nodded sympathetically, as the doors of the elevator finally opened with a groan.
Stepping out of the elevator into the long steel corridor beyond, Jareth started to walk with the flow of other engineers. He stopped abruptly, facing a large poster pasted across a set of fire-safety instructions. He was almost knocked over by a bulky delivery drone as he stepped out from the group; the automaton gave a disgruntled whirr before rumbling away.
Emblazoned in crimson letters, at the head of the three foot high poster; was the familiar slogan:
“The regime needs YOU”.
Further down and superimposed over the second colony; a dusty and windswept planet obscured by clouds of reddish dust, was the second slogan:
“Volunteer for the Third Colony expansion, today!”
Shaking his head silently, Jareth turned. His footsteps clanked and reverberated on the steel flooring as he caught up with the group of engineers, the rearmost two greeted him with a friendly “Good morning Sir”.
---Regime Information Drone, Query: Level -6000, City Vespa---
Level -6000 of the lower sector is an engineer bay, a constantly running repair and assembly line for the two hundred thousand drones in Vespa alone. The city itself is a huge upside-down pyramid structure, stretching several hundred miles across at the surface, and even further underground. The whole thing is maintained, built and repaired by teams of drones, each with a specific task built into them. They never grow tired, never grow bored and never question their orders.
Colony 2 was set up as a mining station. The first city was created to dig down deep into the planets stone and earth. To retrieve and refine the most valuable element known to the regime: Tethium.
---Link to information file: Tethium---
---Link to information file: The almighty Regime---
---End Query: ---
Still not the end of the first chapter, and i know i need to change the structure with the speech, also remembering that this is copied and pasted from word, so the layout has been ruined somewhat....
but that is somthing that is quite easy to rectify, i've tried to go through this section to make it easily read-able as much as possible... but as always, would love to hear any feedback from either Asia, Bronze... or indeed anyone who has somthing to say
oh and about this section:
---Regime Information Drone, Query: Level -6000, City Vespa---
Level -6000 of the lower sector is an engineer bay, a constantly running repair and assembly line for the two hundred thousand drones in Vespa alone. The city itself is a huge upside-down pyramid structure, stretching several hundred miles across at the surface, and even further underground. The whole thing is maintained, built and repaired by teams of drones, each with a specific task built into them. They never grow tired, never grow bored and never question their orders.
Colony 2 was set up as a mining station. The first city was created to dig down deep into the planets stone and earth. To retrieve and refine the most valuable element known to the regime: Tethium.
---Link to information file: Tethium---
---Link to information file: The almighty Regime---
---End Query: ---
Generally about once or twice every two chapters or so i've done a section like this... i found, and so did my mate who read through it, that it is an easy way to give some information on certain aspects of the universe, and also adds some character to the story