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Flavored Monotony
« on: November 03, 2008, 12:29:02 AM »
High school, the proving grounds of your adult identity, that or a final resting place for any and all optimism. A paticular group of friends has grown disillusioned with the future, seeing other friends either give up or work themselves into a corner. They all have nothing that is truly theirs, nothing to take up their massive ammounts of free time. No Drive, No Dreams, No Aspiriations.

They include Enezel the Chow, an intelligent but extremely distant boy who usually doesnt want anything to do with others, even in his group. Jojo The Silverwolf , the outgoing yet delicate youngest member of the group, was advanced to High-school due to high grades, usually sticks close to Enezel. Scyler the tiger, an athletic but shy type who doesnt really speak up. And of course Scyla, the Angsty and mysterious member of the group, is known to have a short temper.

Except for Jojo, everyone is on the way out, Jr's and Seniors all getting ready to get the hell out.

These are the Days at Lovecraft High.

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #1 on: November 03, 2008, 12:47:50 AM »
Im gonn assume this is a premise for a story, or at least some sort of prologue.

Is there going to be a story of this?

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #2 on: November 03, 2008, 01:12:14 AM »
(Its an offhand intro, more characters and challeges are coming up, I'm not really all here right now, lotta things on my mind ^_^)
(Such Propper language, congratulations, most people Tawk liek dis nd dnt evah crrct thmslvs LoL!!!1111!)

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #3 on: November 03, 2008, 01:18:22 AM »
xD! You're awesome!...I ROFL'ed..and you plan these things out very well,too.Kudos...or maybe it's on-the spot-....nvm..excellent job! (really hyper right now...too much candy..>.>.)



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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #4 on: November 03, 2008, 01:53:17 AM »
"A day after a day is a day before a day following a day after a day." Mr. Olonso paced before the large class, a book held up to his nose as he strode. Jojo fiddled with his pen, trying to get the ink to flow again. "Why even Bother Joji?" Jojo looked to his right at Enezel, who was slumped back into his seat, one leg out across the aisle and resting on the support rail of Jojo's desk and the other tapping steadily on the floor. He brushed aside the bright pink bangs that covered his shadowed eyes and licked his lips, waiting for a response. "He...told us to take notes..." "right, of course." Enezel moved his legs and leaned towards Jojo, "what you doing after school?" Jojo looked suprised, "ah, n..nothing, I dont have anything to do." "wanna come over?" "ah...s..sure!" "AHEM" Enezel and Jojo looked over to Mr. Olonso, who was leaning back on the markerboard, "so glad you could re-join us." "No Problem, go on." Enezel crossed his arms and sat back in his seat, giving a wide smile to Mr. Olonso, "your Sarcasm hurts me deeply Mr. Garner." he continued on in his lesson and ignored Enezel's continued whispering to an emberassed Jojo.
The group was clustered in the usual spot, in the shade behind the R'lyeh gymnasium, and were in hot debate about the school's upcoming writing contest. "Its stupid, I mean, our school is named after one of the wierdest, most famous gothic writers ever and yet the only categories are, 'Sports and student life' total bull man!" Scyla was shouting up a storm, the others simply nodding in agreement to appease her. Enezel walked up, closely followed by Jojo, and gave the usual nod to everyone gathered. "What now Sky?" "this damn school, they decide to just ignore the name on the FREAKING WALLS!" "Just let it alone, its nothing." Jojo rubed at his arm, "I wanted to join..." Scyla gave him a look with her only eye that wasny covered by hair, "Join then, sell out, give up, the B$#^#@%# might even pat you on the head!" Jojo looked down at his toes, "N...nevermind." Enezel put a hand on Jojo's shoulder re-assuringly, "Go ahead and do it Joji, do it just to piss her off hah." "I...Guess." "Eni, you care about nill, why do you care now!?" "Joji needs some encouragement, let him learn the hard way." Jojo changed the subject and looked at Carlos, the only one in the group who was in athletics, "What do you think C, should I go for it?" Carlos looked up from a brochure he had in his lap, "I only joined once, diddnt make it." Everyone laughed, Jojo rubbing at his arm nervously again, "Maybey I shouldnt...." Enezel gave him a playful shove, "Do it Joji, come on, show some spirit." Jojo looked up at Enezel's wide smile and blushed, "s...shure, I'll do it." Scyla sat down against the wall, "Well, here we go, another shattered dream to add to our wall, you know I wanted to be a dancer?" "shut up Sky, you wanted to be a laker girl." "same thing.....Just different costumes." Jojo sat down near Enezel, who had gotten into another conversation with some odd husky who had joined the group the other week, his name started with an E, Jojo couldnt remember. He looked through a notebook at his sketches and stopped at one in paticular, blushing vividly again and sighing deeply. Enezel turned, "Whats that Joji?" "N...Nothing!" he shut the book and grinned nervously, Enezel shrugging and going back to his chat. Jojo squinted and looked over at the statue of the school's patron saint, Lovecraft standing tall yet a bit rigid in bronze. "At least I have something to look forward to at the end of today."

First chapter, mainly intro and outline, sorry if its not that well done.

more to come.

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #5 on: November 03, 2008, 02:02:05 AM »
~jaw dropped~...whoa....,I am TOTALLY looking forward to the next one,man!..10 fingers!



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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #6 on: November 03, 2008, 03:28:54 AM »
Wooo... So far, I'm liking the premise of it as well as the intro... Characters seem real, love the sarcasm as well.

Only thing I can really see that would improve this would be adding spacing between all of the quotes and whatnot, make it easier to follow.

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #7 on: November 10, 2008, 03:25:12 PM »
Updating Today  :ded:

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #8 on: November 10, 2008, 11:53:07 PM »
w00t!!..~points to emo and smiles toothily~ I frikin' LUFF this guy!



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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #9 on: November 11, 2008, 02:53:50 PM »
I'm not in it.... v.v

Well, it's good.  Seperating quotes between lines would be nice.

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #10 on: November 12, 2008, 03:34:25 PM »
Definately Updating Today.

Introducing New Characters.  :th_Pyong-1:

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #11 on: November 12, 2008, 09:46:22 PM »
New characters....????????

...I better not be the villain.. >.>

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #12 on: November 12, 2008, 11:43:30 PM »
xD....i don't think you will..



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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #13 on: November 26, 2008, 05:28:53 AM »
"Its been getting colder lately." Jojo tugged his beanie down a bit more on his head, zipping up the collared sweater to his neck. Enezel walked indifferently a good 5 steps ahead, humming some song to himself while his foot focussed it's attention to a beaten soda can he had been kicking for the last mile. Enezel lived on the outskirts of town in a fairly large house. His parents were hardly ever home because both of them had military jobs that kept them away for long stints of time. His uncle, a Vietnam veteran, lives with them to take care of Enezel, much to both of their protest.
Enezel shoved the front door open  with his shoulder and stood in the doorway for a moment, taking in a deep breath and then shouting out, "Serg'nt Garner, Atteenshun!" A very tall but haggard looking chow came into the hallway, scratching at the mussed fur on his head. Jojo leaned in to get a better look and couldnt contain himself when he saw Enezel's uncle sans one leg, "Oh My God!" Enezel gave a harsh look to Jojo and looked back at his Uncle who diddnt seem in the bit least supprised, "yeah, shocking huh, sometimes I still try and wiggle my toes."

Gah....I made like 3 different versions of this freaking scene and they all got corrupted....

and this one isnt even complete!!!

this is all I could salvage!!!

More....soon.....BLARG!!!

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Re: Flavored Monotony
« Reply #14 on: November 26, 2008, 12:56:24 PM »
cool story, i havn't seen a story about hs times in writing and lit. thats like this one cool

 

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