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The Cancer Secret
« on: May 16, 2009, 04:12:33 AM »
Not really the title but I think it would make an interesting suspense story.

Henry Glib passes through college like an aircraft through the sky. With speed, efficience, and ease. Henry, a scientific prodigy, buys a house while working in the field of medical research where he builds a laboratory that is concealed under the house.

A horrible accident causes his beloved pet to die and over the course of a few weeks he becomes an anthro. To his horror, his physical state never returns to human as he remains an anthro. Too ashamed of his failure, he holes himself up in the laboratory and conceals the entrance to the lab.

All of his friends assume he was dead and the police assume suicide. A family moves into the house years later where they are oblivious to Henry's presence under them. Henry's plan was to make a scientific breakthrough that was so extreme that people would look past his failure and his new physical state and be accepted by society. He takes a special interest in incurable diseases.

He over hears the family members speaking discretely about the father of the family having cancer and the mother recently developing cancer. Henry thinks, "Perfect! Test subjects!"

He proceeds to kidnap the family where he performs tests on them outside of moral boundry because of his deperate state of mind. He ends up killing all of them as he goes crazy when he find a cure. The father remains alive but harmed. Henry examines the father's brain tumors for weeks and watches it recede. He finally understands that his pain medication that created was causing the cancer to recede! He had cured cancer with a painless, daily shot.

He took it immediately to a united states government office in washington DC, after fighting off a large group of confused and wierded out witnesses of his anthropomorphism.

the secret service finds out what he has, a cure for cancer, an end for millions of dollars a year worth of government benefiting cancer treatment, so they release teams of men to kill him and destroy the cure for fear of losing money from losing cancer treatment.

It's a race against time as the portable freezer he keeps the drug in only has 72 hours, a run for his life as the secret service are out to him, and an expedition of determination to save all of the people who die from cancer.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #1 on: May 17, 2009, 11:49:30 PM »
i think this seems like a good idea, i'd love to see turned into a story. it has much promise, but the main character turning mentally insase and doing imoral things, i don't know if your reader's will like the idea of a mentally unstable character for a good portion of the story, that's just my opinion tho, feel free to do what you wish.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #2 on: May 18, 2009, 02:11:33 AM »
Well, the purpose of his "mentally unstable" state as you come to call it, is what causes him to be able to do such horrible things to another human without breakingdown or "Feeling bad" about it. These immoral actions are what lead to the discovery of the cure for cancer. This is the purpose for that.

If a rewrite is what the readers request then it shall be done!

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #3 on: May 18, 2009, 10:58:16 AM »
no i didn't want a re write or anything, i'm just throwin out ideas, and throwing in my own opinion, like when i pick up a story and i find that the main character is a bad person or immoral, i just put down the book, but again that is just my opinion.
further more, to be entirly honest short from your doctor jumping into a private practice and conivncing the guy in charge there, that this furry dude has a cure for a previously incurrable diease and the CIA is after him, i don't know how the doctor would make it, i mean, the CIA has nearly unlimited resourses, and this doctor will leave a trail mile wide because of his face, he really dosen't have much going for him. that's just my opinion, like add some outside friends who will help him, like his collage room mate that turned out to be the director of the best hospital

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #4 on: May 18, 2009, 10:50:05 PM »
I understand.

The government is after him and does have unlimited resources but the few members that want him silenced, also have to keep quiet. You know?

Only a group of government officials know about the cure for cancer and only a few know that Henry is the one carrying it. You see, not the entire CIA knows about the situation so the guys after him don't have ultimate power.

Would that be better?

Also, I planned on him having friends and people that were going to help him along the way! Thanks for the comment though!

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #5 on: May 19, 2009, 12:20:49 AM »
thats sounds a bit better, but still, i don't know how our doctor would be able to spread the cure, i'd definantly think that through very well, the CIA part sounds better, but the friends thing is still sketchy, i mean the doctor was presumed dead for 10 or so years. i don't know how he would have any friends if he spent 10 years in solitary confinement in a basement.  (im just thinking logically, you don't have to listen to me, i'm just throwin out a few ideas.)

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #6 on: May 20, 2009, 01:21:31 AM »
I don't know about TEN years. Maybe five to six or something in that region.

Simple, he would look up his old friends and find them. They would be surprised to see him, VERY suprised, and it would take time for them to understand what was going on but they would undoubtedly help him in every way that they could.

To get the secret out, he has to tell the president. the president is someone that Henry believes would be on his side and someone he believes will protect him. Of course his assumptions are correct. The president of the united states is the person he has to talk to get the word out that the cure exists.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #7 on: May 20, 2009, 01:30:13 AM »
i don't know how the doctor would meet the pres if part of teh CIA is out to get him, i mean it's their job to make sure no one gets to him with out their ok.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #8 on: May 20, 2009, 01:56:50 AM »
Not ALL of the CIA is after him and actually it's the secret service's job to keep the prez safe. It's only a select few [of about 7 to 8] CIA members that are in on the currupt plan.

would that work?

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #9 on: May 20, 2009, 11:45:17 PM »
ok the cia part works. i agree with you, but i still don't think your reader's will like the hero of the story (el doctor) doing immoral things like experimenting on humans like that, if the family knew about it, swore to secrecy, and was in with the doctor, then the doctor would seem more of a good guy.

another thing that might help is trying to get the doctor to the president, i mean, he's furry, i think it would be easy for a corrupt CIA dude to see him and take him down so he'd have to be an inconspicuous fur, or have a good disguise that looked inconspicuous.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #10 on: May 25, 2009, 06:17:54 PM »
Realistically, the cure for cancer has not been found as a result of moral boundaries. Becuase he took them and went outside the moral boundries of humanity, he was able to find the cure.

We could make it for the better. We could make it to where he isn't trying to be selfish as in the original story. It could be that he has a father, who was a war hero who is dying young of cancer. His mother has already passed away and his younger brother might have it. Something like that.

He could have the mindset that the six [or so] humans that he'll sacrifice will be towards the future where humanity can thrive cancer free. He's trying to do the world a favor. He feels it is his duty to the planet or somehthing of that caliber.

Will that make him look like a better person?

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #11 on: May 25, 2009, 06:51:03 PM »
it kinda dosen't with me, i mean, if the family agreed to it then yes i'd think it would think he'd be a better person. but if he did it with out their consent, no way in my book, but that is my book. i mean, he experimented on them (in the story) it kinda makes him look really bad if he makes that choice for the family to give their lives away for experimentation. i mean no matter who anybody is, they really don't have the rite to do that kinda thing to people with out their consent.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #12 on: May 26, 2009, 08:25:00 PM »
If you don't have weird experimentation, no one would have found anything, Terrier.. Don't be so rigid about such things. Science is about going where religion refuses to, delving into the deep unknown of the human body and finding things no one dreamed possible. Don't get me started, furball. I'll rip you a new one in less than three posts.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #13 on: May 27, 2009, 01:24:26 AM »
"If you don't have weird experimentation, no one would have found anything, Terrier.."

That's my reasoning, exactly. Without it the story is... well... pointless.

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Re: The Cancer Secret
« Reply #14 on: May 27, 2009, 09:35:08 PM »
and we wouldn't want that, would we?
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