right, it finally worked and I'm slightly less confused than I was at first. I mean, it looks like you have a good hold on your characters, you know who they are but the reader doesnt. You just waltz them in without any indication of who they are or why they're there
The reader doesnt know any of these people and they're talking as if we know everything about them. Other than that, it looks like you have a good grip on things.. oh and I cant read your handwriting too well. Text is better, and make sure it's clear who's speaking first. English goes left to right first and foremost, so the speech bubbles should too, downwards is a secondary concern.
I guess the overall problem is that you know what story you want to tell, and it's a good story, but you dont know how to tell it.
Learn from other comics, furry or not. Do what they do. Learn the rules, then learn to bend and break things to suit your style
