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Now I'll Sonn (Eternally) Die *Altered Draft*
« on: April 01, 2010, 01:04:03 PM »
-Gone With Love-
12/14/09 ‘Now I’ll Soon (Eternally) Die’
By: Lorent K. Cub
Now watch as my emotions run wildly through the air, without concern and compiled by abysmal despair.
Now watch as my soul burns silently into the sky, without passion or love it’ll surely die.

I’ll take what’s ever left of me and drowned it into the darkest sea.
I’ll throw away your memory and make it an eternal enemy.

Soon you will feel the tortures pain that was sown into my soul, through my skin.
Soon you will believe that these scars reflect who I decieve, me and myself with this heart-ache as my sin.

Forever will you create immortal chaos and afflict suffering as you emboss me with thoughts of you.
Forever do I incinerate my fragmented heart till an empty body lay with ashes that tears our love apart.

Now watch as my emotions run wildly through the air still lost and compiled by abysmal despair.
Now watch as my soul burns silently into the sky still screaming for love and pleading to die.

Die I must for life has lost its lust, but with strife I still toss the final flip of fate to help me decide.
Die I will for your touch turns cold this heart that I now scold as I exert my torture inside.

This is what I feel and now…soon after my soul will seal and fall down to the ground with a sound that chimes a heavenly chime for me to rest through out all eternity in time.
« Last Edit: April 19, 2010, 08:43:33 PM by Vince the Dark »
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Re: Now I'll Sonn (Eternally) Die *Altered Draft*
« Reply #1 on: April 07, 2010, 12:30:46 AM »
It's convoluted, it's confusing and I don't think I'll ever be in the mindset to decipher it. I know it's meant to be obscure and obtuse so maybe that's a success on your part.
There's lots of abstraction, not much concrete imagery. Some find that to be a good thing, but there's nothing to grab hold of.
It's just... a blur to me. I understand what you're saying but it's just kind of amorphous.
"Parents always think kids are wasting their youth, and always have done [so] down through the millennia," says Tom Forsyth of RAD Game Tools. "'That Ug, always holding things. His front paws will develop in funny ways. Why can't he walk on all fours like normal proto-hominids?' And so, whatever the kids spend the most time doing, that's always what parents think is a waste of time, and what is corrupting their lives. It doesn't matter what that is. If all they did was homework, parents would be worrying that their kids aren't becoming well-rounded people. And, in fact, parents do this - enrolling math nerds in karate classes and the like. There is no way to win - parental paranoia ensures that kids are always doing the wrong thing."


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