Biggest problem is grammar. A story needs correct grammar, and I recommend Google Docs (which is free! All you need is an account on there and boom! Free easier Microsoft Word!) or if you want, Grammarly. You do need to pay for the premium but the free version works just swell.
Next, if you lack an artist, I'm sure if you post an ad on here in the correct forum, I'm sure many people would love to draw it. I hope you continue this, it's not so bad.
thank you for the comment, for the grammar problem i do have a lot and also english isnt my first language, im doing my best with google translater and i did ask for editor,
no one show, but i pulled it through and fixed it fast, i try to fix and revise before the second week.
and for artist, i tryed to ask for one, god knows how many ad i put but all they came werent as what my comic want, also i thank you again for liking the story, can i ask what you expect and hope for the story to be, it really be helpful that i know my readers what they like or not.
thanks and cheers.