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Offline HowlTheGrayWolf

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Panacea (Poem)
« on: January 31, 2010, 03:26:11 AM »
Panacea

Panacea…..graceful and divine ,
Panacea……if only you were mine.
I would hold you in my arms,  with your body as light as a feather….
But I’m bound by Mortality’s will, by it’s tether.

I cannot stay in this holy place, no matter what temptation,
Even if every moment I look at you, I feel elation.
When I am with you, I feel comfort and warmth,
But I must do this for my life to move forth.

Panacea…..cleanse my soul, your touch so pure
Panacea…..if only I were yours.
I must leave, move my life along,
Even if it means that my heart is shriveled, gone……..

(I hope you guys like it, I whipped this one up a little while ago and decided to share it with you all)
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Re: Panacea (Poem)
« Reply #1 on: January 31, 2010, 12:37:24 PM »
That's really quite good, you should be proud of it. I like the ideas of it and images it evokes.

There are technical issues like the rhythm stumbling, or overstating, or ye olde words, but overall it is a good poem, well done.
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Re: Panacea (Poem)
« Reply #2 on: January 31, 2010, 02:13:11 PM »
Thank you, and yes, it was a little difficult rhyming with some of the words, but I gave it my best.
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