One of my more simple poems...

[WolfCubLorent]

-Memories from The Heart-

1/8/10 “Run Away To Memories” By: Lorent K. Cub


I love you so much so please don’t tell me you’re going home soon.
Instead, stay with me you are special to me.
I wanna run off somewhere with you and leave everything else behind.
I wanna go back to that one summer day, ever on the grass against each other we lay.
The wind blowing caressingly through your soft hair, feelings of love and lust filled the air.
Your skin so tender and pure, just one kiss opened the door.
Your body so warm and sutle, in the sun we gently cuddle.
To me sweet words you whisper, you always were a good kisser.
Thinking of you makes me smile; hating you, this will be denial.
You always are my day’s lover, the shyness in you I now uncover.
Like then I meet the day’s end, our love and your heart I will defend.
Your life and soul you would so willingly give, for you I would end what I live.
Never again Lucia will I leave you alone, pushed up upon you do you pleasurably moan.
I give you my love and take some for myself, being with you now to me is my only wealth.
Now it is time to go, to stay I want this so.
The light now left dark, soon I will be alone in this park.
We part with sweet words and a passionate kiss, the taste of your lips with you in my arms I will miss.
I love you so much, you say forever in love is such.
Gone today wait till tomorrow, till then I’m waiting in sorrow.

(not part of poem) Which type do you prefer to read more, my simple poems like this or the one I posted after this, titled -The Feeling Deep Inside-

[Asia Kali Yusufzai]

where's this "feeling deep inside" poem. I can't seem to find it... or I'm blind. Either can be true.


as for the merits of this poem, it's consistent, it generally flows well, especially in the first half.
there is a bit of a divergence into other topics when you talk about uncovering things about this person, like shyness. It doesn't expand into anything, it just states that you found out about the shyness and then left it at that. Personally i think that if you're not gonna do anything with it, then it shouldn't be in there.

But anyway, the story's kinda cool, it's a good one, in general.