Well first of all when I say eternally death I do mean it's over, no after life no heaven or hell no feelings left.......
Second, don't read it as *kill with hurt* when I wrote it I reversed the words cause I liked the way it sounds, so what it's supposed to be is *kill with much hurt* which obviously means that it was a painful death okay.
Third, I do not believe that death and ryhming should be seperate, when I write I try to write in different ways that most wouldn't...even if it sounds a little sloppy, but yeah.
Forth, that whole master yoda crap I did not take from, that was my own idea and not some stupid saying from some movie, and if that is true then tell me what part exactly it is on in the movie cause I'm sure that those words arn't.....
*Sigh* thank you everyone for your comments, all were helpful and in the end will help me become a better writer, BUT do not tell me to change the theme of my poetry ever because you don't like it, for example; I mixed death with ryhming....that is one of my what I like to call "uneque poems"....helping with some ryhming parts and A LITTLE BIT OF MAKING THE MEANING OF MY WORDS MORE CLEARER is okay but DON'T tell me to change me theme cause I'll just disregaurd it.....
Anyway, thanks again everyone....i guess I'll try to change it then re-post later this week