Hello *waves*I figured to start up a 'Make your own CreepyPasta' thread, so to speak 
The story below is my own. I had to write a story for an assignment. It's my first CreepyPasta, and I know I'm not good ^^; But I would like some critique or comments nonetheless, tell me what you think, please don't be mean 
If you know how I can improve, let me know ^^Now then, this thread I figured would be nice for people to post their own CreepyPasta stories they made up (use your imagination, don't steal stories of other people. They put (a lot of) effort into writing them too.)And to get feedback if they please. 
So by all means, post your own CreepyPasta here too.Ventus' CreepyPasta #1:There was once a little girl named Lilea. She was such a beautiful young girl with a joyful smile. However, she wasn’t the same after she visited the abattoir. An abattoir, fancy word for a place where animals are butchered. A slaughterhouse in other words. Definitely not a place for such a young, defenseless little girl.
Her friends had dared her to visit the local slaughterhouse, thinking that she wouldn’t take up the dare. They had heard rumours that the place was haunted at night.
Lilea, as scared as she was, went inside anyways. She walked around in the building for about half an hour when she decided she had seen enough and was time to leave. She thought the abattoir was dark and smelled of dead animals.
She was almost at the door leading outside when suddenly she heard someone whisper her name. The hairs on the back of her neck stood up.
She didn’t want to turn around and look, but she was curious and so she spun around. She saw a small little girl in a corner, who was crying.
Lilea wondered why the girl was crying, and her fear vanished. She walked towards the girl and asked her what was wrong. The girl looked up and Lilea’s face became pale.
The girl had a cold glance and a cruel smile over her face, this disturbed Lilea, and she stumbled backwards. She then decided to leave immediately and ran towards the door.
The little girl ran after her, screamed, and pulled at Lilea’s hair. She tugged so hard, Lilea fell over backwards onto the floor.
She lost consciousness thanks to the blow to her head.
Lilea awoke on wet grass, surrounded by her friends. It was early in the morning and Lilea saw that the dew was already starting to evaporate because of the warmth of the sunlight shining on the grass.
At first, she thought this was peaceful, until she remembered what had happened in the abattoir.
She started screaming hysterically while her friends tried to calm her down.
Once calmed down, her friends asked her what was going on, what had happened. She started telling them about the girl in the abattoir. As soon as she started explaining how the girl looked like, her appearance, the faces of Lilea’s friends were drained of all colours.
She thought this was weird, off to say the least, and she asked what was wrong. The friends looked at each other until one decided to speak up. A boy stepped forward and sat next to Lilea. His name was Mathew, and he explained that the owner of the abattoir had a daughter once. However, she had passed away several years ago. No one knew exactly how she passed away, the only thing that remained that could be seen as a clue was some of her long black hair. It had stuck in between one of the machines. Besides that there were no further clues as to what had happened or how she died. No blood was found, she had no wounds either. Her body was completely intact. No other traces could be found that could possibly explain how the girl had died.
Lilea had no clue how to react to hearing this, but she was definitely shaken up by hearing this.
No one, not she or her friends, had actually expected the abattoir to be cursed.
Ever since this experience, Lilea has been having nightmares in which the girl with the long black hairs keeps pulling her hairs. Never stopping tugging and pulling. She kept on pulling Lilea, to where she did not know. Every time she would awake in the middle of the night. She never got a good night’s rest ever again.
Because of this, she suffered physically and mentally. Keeping contact with her friends, the outside world, it just broke down. She isolated herself from the rest of the world.
Eventually she found out where the girl in her dreams was pulling her towards to.
After this she lost her mind completely. Her parents decided it was for her own good to confine her in a mental hospital.
Whenever friends or family visited her, she only kept on saying that the girl had shown her the truth.
~END~
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