Constructive criticism:
- I felt like you needed to be more active to control the thread a bit more (this was probably out of your power)
- the escape shouldn't have been so soon, we didn't have many battles before leaving (This could be partially our fault for breaking out so soon)
- I like how you are including more characters from other people's pasts, you should pm them first though to find out if they have anyone to introduce
- a bigger variety of battles, such as 2v2 or team boss battles or sumo mode (small arena where if your out, you lose / fall down a pit or something)
These arent "DO THIS OR ELSE!", they are just little pointers that could help