Shattered Glass: A Broken Heart

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'Love You Too' is my favourite out of those new ones. How can you keep on churning them out like this? I can't do many before my mind starts to draw a blank and demand I do something else for a while...

[Somebody]

I just made this up as I wrote it. Another attempt at poetry. I probably stole it from somewhere and forgot. Anyways I call It simply "Furry"


I look inside of me
All I see is you there
Emotions undecided and clouded
Like a twisted game of truth and dare

I look out the window
Reminders of you are there
Leaves and twigs broken
Noticed in the mind pretending not to care

I look at a painting
Feelings of you are there
Shadowed lines and blurred features
A faded portrait of details it will voilently spare

I look in a mirror
The truth of you is there
A figure that defies my needs
A mere human, the realization lies bare

[Somebody]

I wish I could help, but I'm already fairly broke, Bills plus gas. Also Im buying a Fursona picture. If I had spare cash I'd gladly help

What do you need the cash for?

[Somebody]

Might not wanna forget food =P I have a boa, snakes can take a lot of attention to take care of.

Good luck getting the cash, if you get some money saved up maybe I'll donate when I get some cash.

[Somebody]

17 cents, now thats dedication.

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I would help you out, but I don't have a PayPal or anything similar and I'm scrounging around for money myself, although I don't need it that much right now.

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As thought-provoking as always. Heart & Soul, Using and Vision are my favourites out of the ones here. I would give you some constructive critiscm to help you improve even further, but I can't find anything to criticise.

[Dakota]

i love the new poems as always but they are so sad. remember, i am always here for you

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I don't know why, but that moved me. I can really identify with what is being felt in that poem.

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That one perfectly captures what one would experience if a loved one was away at war or had died in a recent war. I like the idea of the memory fading as she calls out for him.

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(I know it's a hobby...or do I?)
Great poem again. I've noticed that I can identify with the person's pains in almost all your poems. (I assume that's because of your skills) One more thing:
Mental Anguish - Check
Depression - Check
Troubled Past - Check
Determination - Check
Realisation of change in self - Check
Looking good there Sam...

[Dakota]

sadness makes a good poem

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Holy %@£~! Overkill much? Seriously though, these are really powerful and my favourites would have to be: My Eternity, Starting to Remember, Shadows & Nightmares, Let it go, Unforgotten (Living On), So Long and Scars & Bruises.
You have exceeded my expectations and humbled me with your skill.

[Dakota]

i like depressing poetry, infact, its the only kind i like

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I really enjoy depressing poetry, (the more depressing, the better) so I shall never say that it was too depressing.
I am constantly in awe from your ability to transfer such raw emotion into a piece of writing without losing the true nature of the original emotion. This is why you humble me, Sam.