my new poems...ENJOY!

[XXxMaximuMXXx]

                                                                                            notice me!
will he, does he, should he notice me. everyday I wonder and ponder if he notices me.
if he cares for me or looks at me. I wonder if he likes me or he just looks though me.
Inside im bleeing but outside im strong...stronger than anything but love.
He comes towards me, my heart rces, I smie and walk towards him to nearly nearly...
but then he pats my arm and walks to another girl, and hugs her.
i watch and watch, turmoil throwing up around me, but I stay cool i stay strong but inside im bleeding
And he doesnt care, he has his speacial but i am alone.
he laughs and jokes
I bleed and cry
he hugs and cradles
I laugh to die
I drown and am finnaly silent, nothing that the world can give me will take m back, because i
                           am finaly free from his grasp...

Im sorry if it isnt ood, it doesn feel great but im in a lesson and bored so...there, i hope its ok


drifter,drifters gunna getcha

his eyes are black
and his hairs on fire
first snows coming hes coming back

you cant hide under the bed
 he`ll crack your head
youll see hus face in someone else
but she wnt know even herself

he got clarence he`ll get you to
drifter, drifters coming for you

from meh book!

[flames]

That was rather...interesting to read.

[Dr. Strange]

Plenty of emotion, but not too much. There's enough thought in your poem to tug at the creative/imaginative side of your brain. I really like it Max. And it's better than you give credit for. ;]

[XXxMaximuMXXx]

no seriously it isnt good..it makes me cringe...even flames doesnt think so

[flames]

no seriously it isnt good..it makes me cringe...even flames doesnt think so

No, it's good. I'm interested in reading any more like this you may have written.

[XXxMaximuMXXx]

what you are or you arent?

[flames]

I am interested in reading more and I do like what you've written.

[XXxMaximuMXXx]

OOh sorry!


I have seconds to live, i know its not fair. i feel its not fair
but still I try, I try to stand, I try to look into my loved ones faces but my eyews wont open
Im falling, very slowly, but picking up speed,
Im leaving my family behid, there happy now, they dont need me.
my little 11 yr old brother cal, who does wonderous magic, tricks
ill never see talk to him again, but i will pop up in dream and ill watch and keep care of him forever and ever. I fell my dad reassuring hand stroke mine.
"were her, were here for you tessa, you can go now, we love you"
i wait on a litlle longer, i need to hear someone speacial first.
"say it cal, say goodbye." whispers dad
"no i dont want to" whimpers cal, quietly
lets just say yes for the day, i think thoughts coming and going
"i fell stupid," "
just whisper it in her, get close that s it, were not listening"
he leans in, for one last time I fell his breath on my ear
"you can go now, and I dont mind if you haunt me. ill miss yoiu tessa, dont forget me"
I wont forget you little bro, ill never forget you, as long as you remmeber me.
and then their voices fade away and a brightness settle on my chest...

                          ...im free....

[flames]

Nice. There are a few typos, but they don't ruin it...Good job.

[XXxMaximuMXXx]

typos?  and did you read the second top one...it new!

[Dakota]

they are good, i like them

[XXxMaximuMXXx]

i want to talk to him but he ignores me...
what ever i do, he tries his hardest to see past me.
i want to tlk to him..to try and be firends but he doesnt even allow that
hes drawing away from me...and i try no to care. i thought i could cope bu i cant
no matter how hard i try, no matter how hard i try to block out all the sadness.
it finaaly over rides me and im left with longing. i dont think i love him, i know well never be together,hes made sure
but unwanted love always hurts the most,  but my heart is tearing in two, too many things are pulling on it
he wont even acknowledge me, in later life hell probably be happy with some other girl
laughing and singing in the sunshine, i try to forget him, i try my hardest
   but it comes back to me in the end
  an anwanted love....

[Dakota]

aww, thats sad... i will always love you though

[flames]

Quite emotional piece. The joys and sorrows of love...

[XXxMaximuMXXx]

hehe.....*coughs*

up, up, up they go up the bricks they come...
tumbilin, tumbilin, tumbilin, tumbiln tumbiling down they come...

sing it to the row row row your boat tune....i made it myself