First page looks okay, though I have some constructive critique if you want to hear it.
I know you've said you like to have a whole "energy" thing going on in your art, but you should remember that although that may be okay in individual artworks, when you're trying to tell a story, abstracted images and indistinct images are going to work against you. The middle left panel is the weakest of them in that regard. Honestly the only way I could tell that was a leg at all was solely based on the "huff huff" carried over from the first panel. While it still got the idea across, it might not be as strong as if it was more clearly defined. The first panel is the best, because it is very easy to see what's actually in the panel - person being chased by a tank through a desert of some sort.
That doesn't even necessarily mean you have to draw actual clean line art or anything if you don't want to. Just strive to make your outlines a little bit cleaner so they are then clearer for the viewer to see.
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